To: T.Leoni, Manager, Personnel Department
From: Donald Pryzblo , Manager, Data Processing Department
Subject: Payroll checks
I have been reviewing the computer files and I have ran upon several errors. Majority of these errors are made from miscopying information. Your clerks have to be more carefully when preparing these files because my departments time is limited and we don’t have enough time to correct every error that comes our way. For the company’s benefit, I would recommend that your clerks review their work carefully before giving it to the computer operators
Thank you
To make Donald Pryzblo more persuasive to T.Leoni he shouldn't of used bold print in the subject area or used quotations in the first sentence.It made him come off strong to the reader,instead he should have been a little more understanding knowing that they were mistakes that could be fixed. Also he wasn’t really asking for improvement he was demanding it which is not a way to help build up a company.
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